October 6, 2017 at 7:59PM

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Portrait of my Father | Short documentary feedback

Hi there,
I just finished a short documentary on my dad and would love some feedback as it as a very personal project and it is sometimes hard to detach yourself from.
https://vimeo.com/236728433

Here's a quick description of it :
After 28 years working as a Mountain Rescue, my Father retired.
This is a short documentary about his career, his experiences and about a job of which the details are not well known to many.
I have, myself, learned a lot during the two days while making this portrait. The joys of having a job that was more a passion than work, the strong bonds made over the years, but also the risks and the emotional impact of some of the missions.
So, here is a short and condensed piece about a career that is, to me, extraordinary; of a humble and courageous man that I call my Dad.

Cheers in advance :)

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The link doesn't seem to work on my end.

October 7, 2017 at 4:36PM, Edited October 7, 4:36PM

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Elmoutasam Aziz
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https://vimeo.com/236728433 That's strange, it should work with this one :). Otherwise copy and paste into the browser maybe ?
Cheers

October 7, 2017 at 8:35PM

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Florent Piovesan
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October 8, 2017 at 6:40AM

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Now that was a really beautiful reflection. I love these types.
One small comment though, I wish you would have also incorporated natural sounds. Either way, it was very moving and I really enjoyed watching it from beginning to end. Chapeau bas!

October 8, 2017 at 12:41PM

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Elmoutasam Aziz
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Thank you so much !!
I did think of including natural sounds at the start but chose not to after trying it for a few clips.I wanted the image and the voice to be the main focus if that makes sense.
Thanks again for the feedback, really appreciated :).

October 9, 2017 at 4:27AM

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Florent Piovesan
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Yup that makes perfect sense. Best of luck, and thanks again for sharing it with us!

October 9, 2017 at 1:08PM

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Elmoutasam Aziz
Chief Learning Officer
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well done!

October 10, 2017 at 11:47PM

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Ekim Namwen
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Thanks a lot !!

October 11, 2017 at 6:58AM

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Florent Piovesan
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Florent, I think it is very nicely done; I would agree with the other poster that some natural sounds would be good. Two small suggestions also: (a) a small grammar point: he was not a "Mountain Rescue" [a 'Rescue' is the act of actually saving] - but a "Mountain Rescuer" [i.e. the person doing the rescuing]; (b) and if you can, I would include less view of your father from behind in slo-mo.
But these are small things; I would be proud if I had produced this.

October 11, 2017 at 8:54AM

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Thomas Dove
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Hi there,
Thanks for the feedback and the kinds words.

Regarding the title it is a bit tricky as I couldn't find an actual answer.
He doesn't rescue mountains, so I thought 'rescuer' was incorrect. Police Rescue was the closest thing so I used this but happy to take the comments on board.
(I've actually seen both used when I search through internet)
And the reason for including many slow-mo shots of my father from behind is that I only had a day to shoot and had originally anticipated the video to be shorter. So I didn't have a lot of variety of shots to match the voice over :).

Thanks again.

October 12, 2017 at 3:35AM

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Florent Piovesan
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Beautiful! Nicely done.

October 14, 2017 at 1:10AM

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David Summers
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Thank you so much :) !!

October 14, 2017 at 6:04PM

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Florent Piovesan
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