I'm Cade Taylor, a student filmmaker and aspiring Director/Screenwriter. I try to draw my biggest inspiration from the Coen Brothers and Woody Allen. Like any beginner, I am learning the craft and struggling to create.
That was a really cool camera test/short and it's awesome to see how you're taking the rejection. I get discouraged and seeing peoples drive inspires me as well. This short felt like a trailer to a bigger project (I don't know if that was the intention), but it definitely shows some serious promise. Keep up the good work and good luck with your next project!
I'd recommend trying to stick to one location with a film as short as that. Not only will it make the geography of your world make sense but also production will be much easier. If you must jump between rooms, maybe start with wide shots to establish the different locations and use drastically different set dressing and lighting (maybe even gels if you want to be surreal). That might help with switching locations. Also, especially in horror, music and sound scape can be your friend. Different sounds for different areas on top of a wide shot could signify new spots. I hope this helps, and good luck on the film!
That's awesome that you're supporting your daughter so much. I wasn't lucky enough to have film resources in high school but there's always a way to get started. I'd recommend asking friends to help you out and seeing if you can find like minded individuals. More than anything it's willing to embarrass yourself over and over again, not get discouraged and learn from your mistakes!