When you make it your life's passion. Anyone else who says otherwise can kiss your &%#.
Dallin, this was not bad at all and don't let it get you down. You made something quality on I imagine no budget, so you are one step closer.
I watched looking for negatives since you asked, and two things stuck out to me.
A) Shot of Dorito bag about half way in. It's wrinkled to death. That's a deal breaker for them. Did you bring enough bags?
B) Effects. The skew effect worked great, but you are going against actual studios, despite what this competition is all about. Effects are tough so avoid them unless you have a budget or very talented team working on them.
I am personally trying to start my commercial gig (low budget stuff) as we speak, and I'm curious... where are you located? Maybe we can make this a joint effort.
Lots of good answers here. I've found that the single most important thing to shooting a great wedding film is planning & teamwork. You need to build experience first, because you've got know how to handle all of the left field situations that can pop up, and you and your team need to be ready to handle them without panic.
Your shooting team must know their roles throughout the varying parts of the day, and they must understand how to shoot for the edit. (Shooting in sequences, building a scene, etc).
Your team is not limited to just your cinematography team, but also to every other vendor at the wedding. All of you are one big team, and need to work together and communicate to make the day better for the client, and to improve your product. The very best wedding professionals do this.
I agree above that shots of make-up, details etc are very much overused. They are important, but should serve as a transitional element to your edit, rather than a crutch. (Though when things are rough in a particular edit, go ahead and use it to save you).
I think the biggest overlooked point with wedding films is music and sound. It's a given in terms of capturing dialog at the ceremony/reception. I consider this entry level. What I'm referring to is the sound design, the mix, and the creative selections. I know that music is certainly a taste thing, but personally I'm am so sick and bored of the twangy "folk" indie love songs that get used over and over. There's no drama in them to me, but that's probably a taste thing I guess.
I think you should carefully select songs that build up and match the emotion on the screen, and then mix the dialog while avoiding the lyrics of the song as much as possible. Take a song, and cut and dice it to fit your films story arch. Then, make sure to finish with foley...yes, FOLEY! It fattens up the piece and adds a big element....try it!
I like to simplify. The glide cam and job stuff looks great, and I use it, but lately i've been using it less and less, so that I can cover one particular moment in finer detail. Sometimes focusing on the people is the most moving image.
Here are some of our recent films, we've been implementing these things the past year and our work as improved SO MUCH as a result!
"Take me to Valhalla" http://vimeo.com/107292214
"Once in a Lifetime" http://vimeo.com/103195924