No one cares about your short.
I will outline. I will rewrite. I will polish. I will write visuals. I write not write an avatar for myself.
Nicely distilled. Showing rather than telling is the ultimate name of the game. I'm no De Palma but how much more effective would "The Untouchables" example have been if Costner had simply racked the shotgun instead of verbally answering the question? Much more. Disseminate information to your audience with visuals rather than dialogue and you put yourself in a position to make a good film.
Exactly. I've been to enough trade shows and sponsored cocktail mixers over the years to know that new products, especially expensive ones, trickle into the market at a glacial pace.
Never begin your film with your protagonist waking up in the morning and going to work.