The sound quality is fine, you just have to work on the mix a bit. By far the strongest element is the cinematography. Some really nice shots in there. Great job color correcting as well.
I agree with letting the edit breathe a bit in between dialogue. And yeah, I would bring the music down when he's speaking. It also sounds like you didn't place any audio transitions on the edit points, causing those subtle clicking noises. I could be wrong though...
I think you're gonna make some great docs in the future!
Nice article - though Garageband is much better bang for your back than Logic, especially for low-budget projects or for someone starting out. It is extremely powerful for what it is, and comes free with every mac. Logic can open up Garageband project files once you choose to upgrade, so you're not hamstrung by starting out in GB first.
I highly recommend checking out Garageband and Beyond for tutorials on getting the most out of it: https://www.youtube.com/user/GaragebandandBeyond - Llewyn has some amazing tips on getting pro sounds out of relatively cheap gear.
Having composed the music for all my short films, the biggest issue for me still is mixing and mastering. You need training and proper gear to do it right and have your mix sound good on various speaker systems. For anything beyond low budget projects, I think it's totally worth the $$ hiring a professional who spent time and money learning the craft and purchasing the gear. Of course, it helps being a musician as well!
Check out my latest, music done 100% in Garageband: https://vimeo.com/87878634 and the separate soundtrack on Soundcloud: bit.ly/1QWXJlf
Well, one gets constantly turned down in this business, it's good to just get used to it and decide to either learn from it or ignore it. And then move on. Being on SotW would obviously be nice, but they have valid reasons for rejecting shorts.
I'm pro film and pro digital. It would be a shame to see film fall into disuse. I think film is great for shooting period pieces or big epics, generally. It has a nice, tactile texture that makes a story feel authentic and lived-in. Digital is great for comedies, etc. where you shoot lots of takes, or something that should feel clinical. But then there's always someone who uses format in unexpected and interesting ways. So much of it is intuitive (barring budgetary constraints). I don't like rules and certainly don't want to limit myself to format in telling a story.
A skilled DOP is more important than format. So I totally agree with those who believe that story prevails. And the more tools we have to tell our stories, from iPhones to IMAX, the better. Short End was shot on c300, 35mm and an iPhone :) They were all needed to make the story work. And at the end, that's the underlying message. If you see something else in it, that's cool too.
The potential danger I see with digital is perhaps a diminishing level of discipline or respect for the craft in the next generation of filmmakers. But we shall see...
And no - this wasn't my first short. You can click through to my Vimeo page to see some of my other films. Thanks for your thoughts, very interesting to hear! Looking forward to your video essay. All the best Ryne!
Wow, I only saw your comment just now - I thought my post ended up slipping through the cracks. Your thoughtful response is right along the lines of what the aim was, and you even noticed things I hadn't realized (aesthetic dystopia :-), so thank you for this! Of course, feel free to reference Short End in your work, though I'll have to get back to you on my thoughts. Are you still producing your video essay?
And yes, I did submit it to Short of the Week, but was turned down.
Also on YouTube: http://youtu.be/lXFSw2hkvtY #bump