Nice short! Kept my attention almost all the way until they're in the car where the pace seems to dip, then just sort of end. I disagree with Dan on the oner, I think it worked seamlessly. I like the gritty look with the grain and grade but I'd say that the fact that after the girl shouts for her mum, she continues to do what she does, then right at the end she glances and sees her and chases her, makes me think the mum is possessed and just doesn't care if her kid watches? There's also a moment when the kids do nothing and pause after they get in the car, I felt like this damaged the pace for me also, but really cool you did this in 2 weeks!
this is (sarcastically) true but you just don't have to be a dick.