I agree with Cary Knoop. I think your characters are great as well.
But you often cut between two angles of the same character. The cuts are a bit awkward. I guess you are doing it so the viewer won't get bored.
I think instead you should have the characters do something; either walk around the house, show the viewers where they used to drink (terrible example, I know. It's way easier to critisize than it is to created ;) ), or so. That way you can change location more often so it don't get so tedious.
I think you're telling a great story with great characters, but you need more creativity in your story telling.
Hope that made sense. Keep up the good work
Not many of these matches the film's style. The Pulp Fiction poster was pretty cool, though
WhenI Got writers block, I usually make up a story in my head in about 10 minutes. Just the important scenes/plot points. Doesnt have to be a good story (it rarely is) Then I analyze it, and then I know what the foundation for the story I actually wanna tell is, and the rest pops up more or less automatically when writing the first treatment.
Writing a 30-page script at age 13? Damn, you go!
Wish I had that discipline in that age.
If it's just a small project that you do to learn to make a short and not anything that'll be able to get into a festival, just use copyright material.
Not that my productions have been professional, but I do the same as S. Baldassarre. Only replay the video to check of technical errors, when directing.
Sometimes if the shot is difficult and we haven't planned it very well, I'll look at the video to see what should be changed. But again.. that's because I'm not exactly a professional.