Toby Garside
Writer, Director, Director of Photography, Indie Filmmaker
Hello my name is Toby and I am Writer, Director and a Director of Photography. I'm currently finishing off University or as I like to call it 3 years of me making films without being judged.
I post short films, animations and Filmmaking Tutorials on my YouTube Channel which are aimed at Beginners to the craft of filmmaking.
Personally I went to film school so I could spend 3 years making films and building up my showreel. Whilst it's not necessary to go to film school, it can be a good opportunity to get you started within the industry.
A7sII, I've used both GH4 and A7sII and in my opinion the A7sII comes on top. In my opinion is has a better picture quality, plus the ability to shoot in low light which has saved me a number of times. The one issue with the A7sII is the menu.
Get someone else to edit your film, especially someone who has no previous connections to the footage - since this allows someone to edit your film with no strings attached to certain shots that may have took hours to take whilst laying in a puddle or random non important shots of birds in the sky, which too you may have some personal and sentimental value. However, to everyone else it probably won't have the same effect.
France, Germany and Denmark all have pretty big film scenes.
Before we begin I'll like to say for your first short it is pretty good and shows a lot of potential, however their a number of things that stops it from being more than just an amateur film.
The first thing is the dialogue. Now don't worry, dialogue is one of the hardest things to get right and when watching the film I noticed that most of the dialogue was good however there are some moments where dialogue needs to be improved or removed. For example, when the waitress walks up to the table it would of been better if she didn't speak and the assassin gives her order and the mans order before she could mutter anything. This would instantly show who has the most authority in the room and I would go well with her dominant attitude. Try writing a short script with no dialogue, since this will allow you to gain a better understanding for when you need to use dialogue.
Secondly the sound, in my opinion sound is one of the most important aspect of a film, especially for indie films since it's usually a dead give away for an amateur film. There are moments in the film where you know you've used foliage. In addition there are moments where the sound doesn't seem fluid but rather it seems jumpy especially in the dialogue. Another problem is the echo. Now I know when it comes to locations you can't pick and choose at this level, however you should test the sound quality before you shoot, therefore you can adjust and see which other methods of recording can be better in this location.
Finally you need to add more light into the scene especially for black and white films. Now there were some points in the film where the noise seemed aesthetically pleasing and there were other points where it was just to noisy.
Now there are certain things you did well, for example you kept the story simple, had a small cast and also used a small number of locations which is great for short films. In addition the story was engaging and I generally did not expect the twist at the end. Another point I should bring up, is showing less might of worked better in the death scene, especially with amateur actors.
Some people believe that shorts are a different craft entirely and have their own set of skills than features. Now I don't believe this is entirely true however I can see where they are coming from. Making a short has a lot of potential to spread your message quickly and one could say it easy making a short film but it's hard to master the short format.
A no budget feature film is always a good idea especially if you're trying to leap into the industry where as short films are usually seen as a different format.