Visually looks good. No questions there.
Since you are way above the intermediate level, I have questions that I hope gonna challenge you :)
- How is this a short film? This looks more like a b-roll with music. Story? Theme?
- 3 years???? I counted 5 locations at most.
So, you get top grades for video, titles, and credits, but story, script, and time to market get failing grades! And I mean it in the most supportive way! ;)
Andy, how about shoes? Black or brown? High or low? Long or fat? If you've worn shoes, you know what fits you.
If you shot projects, at least 10 of them, you'd know which lenses fit your taste.
So, do get behind a camera and start shooting -- you'll pick up a lot of insight, far more than "how to pick a proper lens".
Nathan, get a used A7S -- everybody is getting rid of them to get the Mk2 version. The advantage of A7S over 70D is that you can light with just LED panels. Get 6 of those, for like $70 each. You can store all of them in a backpack. This is a sharp contrast with 70D's lightning needs where you'd have to get at least three 800W redheads.
This quote here: "It's unfortunate for SD owners who haven't had their cameras very long..." makes a perfect case for renting high-end cameras rather than buying them.
The filmcity's rigs are a great place to start -- you do get ahead in controlling the costs when compared the DIY route.
I bought an FC-02 and kept fine-tuning it after every shoot. The end result:
$197 - FILMCITY FC-02 with Camera Cage & Matte box
$20 - Neewer Magic Arm for monitor
$16 - FOTA DP3000 M1 Shoulder Pad
$24 - 2x alumin. rods 45cm M12 thread
$28 - 4x alumin. rods 30cm M12 thread
$40 - 4x gear ring belt
$6 - black flat washers
$170 - Fotasy FF2B Quick Release Follow-Focus
$6 - Neewer M12 thread rod connectors
$6 - SmallRig m12 thread rod caps
$75 - 2 additional counterweights
$588 - Total
Sometime ago at the Lenzbabi...
Engineers are like: we cant get it sharp wide-open.
Marketing is like: we got this ;)