Now that Arri finally has a 4k camera, the elites can now safely sanction the resolutions the rest of us plebes have been working with for years.
Hi Stephen. Your production values are strong and the core of your story is pretty good. I think you have something to work with.
First the bad news:
The script has lots of problems and 15 minutes is too long.
The good news:
Because your film is so long, you actually have enough material to "rewrite" the story in post without reshooting. Try and get it down to 5-7 minutes.
It will be brutal process, but you will be a better filmmaker when you're done.
Take some time to research what makes a good story. Learn about character arcs, motivation, tension.
You should be able to answer these questions for each scene:
- what is the goal of this scene?
- what do the characters want?
- what are the characters doing to advance their desires?
One you have the answers, story board out your new "script" with the beats you want to hit.
Mad Max: Fury Road was actually cut this way. Here's an interview with Margaret Sixel, the editor of the movie: