Years ago, I was alone and bored one weekend, so I made this: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=P4ygENN9MtA
You need to be able to do most of the post in your head while you're shooting.
I didn't put a credit roll on this, first, because its unfinished but mostly because it seems silly to roll one name.
I'll do this again one day - with a complete script - now that I'm a lot better at editing.
I promise to surround myself with the best people so that I can talk less and listen more. I'll keep in mind that some of the very best scenes were re-written on-set by the cast & crew because they often have a lateral view and actually know and feel stuff that I don't.
My 17th day flying DJI: https://vimeo.com/278614325 and the previous days: https://vimeo.com/lensavage - speakers on for music. Enjoy.
I heard this piece of music: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=fA3XjrgrD2E and quickly wrote a film in my mind. I then did sort-of a pitch video with stock footage and text to create this: https://vimeo.com/263263539 - a corny old story told 1,000 times but I'll make that 1,001.
The long dialog from the hobo was good but keep in mind that - if you were there in person, where would your eyes be? Once you have a sense of who is speaking, you would likely look occasionally at the listener to see his transforming attitude to what was being said. When you watch good film, you'll see that the camera is quite often NOT on the talking head but, perhaps, and I believe in this case, the progressive changing of attitude of the listening/maturing character would really carry the audience progressively and move the story forward.
Shooting across the speaker to the listener adds continuity to a cut to a solo of the listener and the shorter visuals with the long dialog keeps it interesting. A solo closeup is a punctuation - the longer you hold on it the less effect it has, but of course, sometimes a compelling character (that you can't take your eyes/camera off of) gets a longer take.
Also, you went long on location and lost the light so I was left wondering where the afternoon went in a 5 minute scene with 2 hours of light change. That caused another issue; large aperture with less depth of field, making even slight movements go out-of-focus. If you have access to an actual 3-chip pro video camera, then the focus and to some degree, light loss would have been less of an issue. I agree with a previous post about sound. Like most viewers, I tolerate so-so visuals with great audio more than the opposite. A good film is 2 or 3 great scenes and no bad ones.
When you stop learning, you are in the grave or you've just given up. Keep producing and keep learning and sharing. Thank you for sharing your film.