born and raised in Miami fl, When to school, by high-school i realized I wanted to direct films and now i'm on that journey.
loved the reference to fight club in the last frame...
//first I must say, I have never critique anything, I have very little experience in directing, and editing, so my analysis will be seen less on the technical side, and more through the eyes of an audience.//
The short film's title is "SUBJECT 001 FINAL VERSION mp4"; this looks unprofessional, and an individual is not going to want to watch a short film with this title.
We know its the final version; why else would you have uploaded it, and no one needs to know its a mp4. Most short films(on youtube) go by "title(year) (short film)", you don't have to do the generic title(year) and the words short film, but anything is better than "SUBJECT 001 FINAL VERSION mp4".
The first thing that was a little hard to go through was the audio, Especially the speakers voice, his voice is going to be heard through out the film and if its too loud or only being heard through one ear, no one will like it. The beginning of a film is the most important, its suppose to hook the audience in, if they cant get through the first 2 minutes then you will lose their attention. Christopher Nolan used a technique in "following" where he made sure the audio(and lighting) were "good" at the beginning of his film so the audience wouldn't notice how poorly produce the rest of the film was because by then they would already be captured by the story.
The story was interesting but also confusing at times, I think you relied to much on dialogue, I understand that you need to use dialogue to further the story or explain back story, but it felt like you just used almost all video as background for the narrator, which you can use but don't abuse.
The use of black and white was also weird, you were using both for events in the past and for events in the present. I thought the way you used it was cool, It made it feel like subject 001 was living in a corrupted place, but it also confused me.
Lighting is also important, shooting outside is good because the natural light can be helpful, but some of your shots were over exposed.
Lighting inside was okay, if you are limited on light then its best if you shot near windows .
one thing that really bugged me was when you were switching aspect ratios, if you're gonna switch ratios then make sure that who ever's watching can't notice. I noticed, and it was distracting, I don't know if it was done intentionally or by mistake, but aspect ratios can be used to signify different things if used properly.
The story was emotionally lacking, I didn't really know our main protagonist "001", I knew her name but i didn't know who she was. The story needed more character development, I didn't see the speaker as really a antagonist, and I didn't really care if our protagonist died or not. I didn't feel any emotions towards her, and i didn't really feel any emotions for the antagonist; if their was one. It was difficult to know what the conflict even was, the story is the most important part of any film.
// I'm sorry if I wasn't helpful, or if I was too hard, Making films takes practice and patience, you can only get better. I hoped i helped you.//