March 6, 2016

The Script Reader's Checklist: 60 Things That Will Land Your Screenplay in the Trash

If you ever manage to get your script in front of a script reader, you're kind of lucky, but you're also kind of screwed.

Readers are notoriously known for dismissing scripts, tossing them for having a boring first paragraph, poor formatting, or less. (You really can't blame them — they have to comb through hundreds of those things.) So, how do you better your chances of getting a pass from one of these gatekeepers? Well, maybe knowing how they judge each one would help.

During his time working as a reader for different L.A. production studios, Oscar-nominated screenwriter Terry Rossio compiled a checklist to help him better evaluate scripts, and decided to share it on his blog. They definitely will help you know whether or not your script is headed toward the trash. Check it out below:

Checklist A: Concept & Plot

  • Imagine the trailer. Is the concept marketable?
  • Is the premise naturally intriguing -- or just average, demanding perfect execution?
  • Who is the target audience? Would your parents go see it?
  • Does your story deal with the most important events in the lives of your characters?
  • If you're writing about a fantasy-come-true, turn it quickly into a nightmare-that-won't-end.
  • Does the screenplay create questions: will he find out the truth? Did she do it? Will they fall in love? Has a strong 'need to know' hook been built into the story?
  • Is the concept original?
  • Is there a goal? Is there pacing? Does it build?
  • Begin with a punch, end with a flurry.
  • Is it funny, scary, or thrilling? All three?
  • What does the story have that the audience can't get from real life?
  • What's at stake? Life and death situations are the most dramatic. Does the concept create the potential for the characters lives to be changed?
  • What are the obstacles? Is there a sufficient challenge for our heroes?
  • What is the screenplay trying to say, and is it worth trying to say it?
  • Does the story transport the audience?
  • Is the screenplay predictable? There should be surprises and reversals within the major plot, and also within individual scenes.
  • Once the parameters of the film's reality are established, they must not be violated. Limitations call for interesting solutions.
  • Is there a decisive, inevitable, set-up ending that is nonetheless unexpected? (This is not easy to do!)
  • Is it believable? Realistic?
  • Is there a strong emotion -- heart -- at the center of the story? Avoid mean-spirited storylines.

"And please, don't begin with your lead character waking up in the morning after a pan of the junk in his room. It's by far the most commonly chosen opening."

Checklist B: Technical Execution

  • Is it properly formatted?
  • Proper spelling and punctuation. Sentence fragments okay.
  • Is there a discernible three-act structure?
  • Are all scenes needed? No scenes off the spine, they will die on screen.
  • Screenplay descriptions should direct the reader's mind's eye, not the director's camera.
  • Begin the screenplay as far into the story as possible.
  • Begin a scene as late as possible, end it as early as possible. A screenplay is like a piece of string that you can cut up and tie together -- the trick is to tell the entire story using as little string as possible.
  • In other words: Use cuts.
  • Visual, Aural, Verbal -- in that order. The expression of someone who has just been shot is best; the sound of the bullet slamming into him is second best; the person saying, "I've been shot" is only third best.
  • What is the hook, the inciting incident? You've got ten pages (or ten minutes) to grab an audience.
  • Allude to the essential points two or even three times. Or hit the key point very hard. Don't be obtuse.
  • Repetition of locale. It helps to establish the atmosphere of film, and allows audience to 'get comfortable.' Saves money during production.
  • Repetition and echoes can be used to tag secondary characters. Dangerous technique to use with leads.
  • Not all scenes have to run five pages of dialogue and/or action. In a good screenplay, there are lots of two-inch scenes. Sequences build pace.
  • Small details add reality. Has the subject matter been thoroughly researched?
  • Every single line must either advance the plot, get a laugh, reveal a character trait, or do a combination of two -- or in the best case, all three -- at once.
  • No false plot points; no backtracking. It's dangerous to mislead an audience; they will feel cheated if important actions are taken based on information that has not been provided, or turns out to be false.
  • Silent solution; tell your story with pictures.
  • No more than 125 pages, no less than 110... or the first impression will be of a script that 'needs to be cut' or 'needs to be fleshed out.'
  • Don't number the scenes of a selling script. MOREs and CONTINUEDs are optional.

"And as a reader, you quickly recognize some key patterns. Like all scripts with fancy covers are bad. Scripts submitted by agents are at least well-written. And nonstandard layout -- especially crayon -- is a sure sign of trouble."

Checklist C: Characters

  • Are the parts castable? Does the film have roles that stars will want to play?
  • Action and humor should emanate from the characters, and not just thrown in for the sake of a laugh. Comedy which violates the integrity of the characters or oversteps the reality-world of the film may get a laugh, but it will ultimately unravel the picture. Don't break the fourth wall, no matter how tempting.
  • Audiences want to see characters who care deeply about something -- especially other characters.
  • Is there one scene where the emotional conflict of the main character comes to a crisis point?
  • A character's entrance should be indicative of the character's traits. First impression of a character is most important.
  • Lead characters must be sympathetic -- people we care about and want to root for.
  • What are the characters wants and needs? What is the lead character's dramatic need? Needs should be strong, definite -- and clearly communicated to the audience.
  • What does the audience want for the characters? It's all right to be either for or against a particular character -- the only unacceptable emotion is indifference.
  • Concerning characters and action: a person is what he does, not necessarily what he says.
  • On character faults: characters should be 'this but also that;' complex. Characters with doubts and faults are more believable, and more interesting. Heroes who have done wrong and villains with noble motives are better than characters who are straight black and white.
  • Characters can be understood in terms of, 'what is their greatest fear?' Gittes, in CHINATOWN was afraid of being played for the fool. In SPLASH the Tom Hanks character was afraid he could never fall in love. In BODY HEAT Racine was afraid he'd never make his big score.
  • Character traits should be independent of the character's role. A banker who fiddles with his gold watch is memorable, but cliche; a banker who breeds dogs is a somehow more acceptable detail.
  • Character conflicts should be both internal and external. Characters should struggle with themselves, and with others.
  • Character 'points of view' need to be distinctive within an individual screenplay. Characters should not all think the same. Each character needs to have a definite point of view in order to act, and not just react.
  • Distinguish characters by their speech patterns: word choice, sentence patterns; revealed background, level of intelligence.
  • 'Character superior' sequences (where the character acts on information the audience does not have) usually don't work for very long -- the audience gets lost. On the other hand, when the audience is in a 'superior' position -- the audience knows something that the characters do not -- it almost always works. (NOTE: This does not mean the audience should be able to predict the plot!)
  • Run each character through as many emotions as possible -- love, hate, laugh, cry, revenge.
  • Characters must change. What is the character's arc?
  • The reality of the screenplay world is defined by what the reader knows of it, and the reader gains that knowledge from the characters. Unrealistic character actions imply an unrealistic world; fully-designed characters convey the sense of a realistic world.
  • Is the lead involved with the story throughout? Does he control the outcome of the story?

Okay, maybe juggling every single item on the checklist is impossible if you're a screenwriter just trying to do your thing. If that's you, these are the three most common problems found in scripts — universal issues that you should probably try to avoid like the plague:

  • The story begins too late in the script: Your beautiful 10-page opening might've been thrilling to write, but it usually equals 10 or more minutes of boredom on screen. You need to get to the point with the moving parts of your story: characters' wants needs and conflict. After that, you're off and burning.
  • No meaningful conflict: Do all of your scenes have a conflict? If your answer is no, cut the ones that don't, or add conflict to them. Believe it or not, a beautiful scene without conflict is usually useless. Furthermore, the main conflict in your story — is it really a conflict? "How do I know if it is or not?" Ask yourself, "Is my audience unsure of whether or not my character will be successful in overcoming their opposition to get what they want?"
  • It's formulaic: I know that all of those screenwriting books and classes told you how to put your hero through a journey, but archetypes and formulas get tiresome to read. Rules are meant to be broken, so break a few when you write your script.

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12 Comments

http://www.jengovey.co.uk/screenwriters_friend/script_readers_checklist.... slightly different but knocking around the same time I worked there as a reader.

March 6, 2016 at 10:34PM, Edited March 6, 10:59PM

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Jonathon Sendall
Stories
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More like "How to kill creativity before starting your screenplay"

March 7, 2016 at 2:14AM

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Emerson Shaw
Student
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More or less my same thought. Going through the list, I could feel the writer's block coming after 10 or 15 points :D I would call this checklist "The Writer's Block Magnet".

March 7, 2016 at 4:13AM

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David R. Falzarano
Director / Writer / Editor
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LOL @ "all scripts with fancy covers are bad."

So, no fancy cover, otherwise the presumption is that it will be bad :-p
Sometimes people just see what they expect...

March 7, 2016 at 4:20AM

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WalterBrokx
Director, DOP, Writer, Editor, Producer
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Here's a question for you guys. How important really is page count? I have two scripts that feel to me very 'tight' so to speak but they clock in around 80 pages. I'm not interested in adding fluff.

March 7, 2016 at 11:42AM

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For independent, that's actually perfect. Ted Hope said something along the lines of 90 is the new 120 and 80 is the new 90.. or something like that.

March 7, 2016 at 11:54AM

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bobunitone
Editor/Director/Writer/All Round Great Dude
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I have a 105 page script that I wish was 90. If it works at 80 and there's nothing expensive written, you're in really good shape already.

April 5, 2016 at 1:16PM

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Brooks Reynolds
Director/DOP
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The first cue that usually lands my screenplay in trash is my name on it. Just kidding. Great article

March 7, 2016 at 1:54PM

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Bluedart Parcels
Director of Photography, BlueDart Parcels
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Why not just write and put your thoughts on paper. You can't learn anything just by going off a checklist.

March 8, 2016 at 2:06AM, Edited March 8, 2:06AM

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Donavan Seschillie
Director, Director of Photography, Editor, Writer
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Great article, though one suggestion would be to worry about these things during editing as opposed to starting from scratch. Keep them in mind, but get it on the page first!

March 9, 2016 at 8:14AM, Edited March 9, 8:32AM

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Thomas Byrne
Student
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And they get $10 per script! What does that tell you? You get what you pay them for.

March 26, 2016 at 1:35AM

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Jack Raymond
Writer-Producer-Director-Cinematographer-Editor
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This checklist is solid. Keep in mind, this checklist contains requirements for a Hollywood movie. The negativity in these comments is frustration at the daunting task of meeting all these requirements, as well as pushback against being told what to do with regard to creativity.

But if you have a great idea--and believe me, many of you don't (although you think you do)--then you're going down this checklist saying "Yes" to each and every item.

Bottom line: If you can't say yes to every last one of these things? Then you and your idea/screenplay aren't ready to be recommended by a reader. Let me reiterate: Your idea should be so freakin' good that you glide through this list, WITH EASE, nailing every last point.

That's when you're ready. And yes, it will feel like hitting the lottery, because endorphins will cascade over your previously insecure little brain and now all you have to do is write your script, if you haven't already.

As for the commenter who says readers get paid $10 per script, I read 20 per week at my job reading for an A-list producer and I get paid ZERO dollars. Can he please get me a job, thank you.

July 16, 2016 at 9:15AM

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I saw Terry Rossio do a talk once in Vancouver, mainly about his writing habits. I think the "start late, leave early" philosophy works great in lots of areas of screenwriting.

July 16, 2016 at 10:21PM

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Tim Aucoin
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